Take my hand so I can put all this behind us

既然大家都觉得不错 就可以了

写得不错，刚看完

用英语能表达自己的感受，精神可佳，我们都是在不断地学习，起码我是这样！

写的还不错啊。

看懂了，写得不错，加油！[s:2]

不错，要加强英语学习啦。好久没有看啦。

语法错误很多。也不地道。
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& U4 ?$ E! f" J# |4 Y譬如：now I become a man who think carefully and have responsibility for my saying and doing.
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6 A! z! t+ ~1 N4 Q这样改更好：I have become a man who thinks carefully and has responsibility for my words and actions by now.

斑竹我不怕得罪你，我觉得你是中文的直接翻译。

% G  c/ w6 h2 k, s$ G! S) n我认为，写英语要按照老外的习惯去写，不要用中国人的表达方式去写。

I may have a role as an individual,a son and a student ,and each of these roles is important to me.
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我认为这么改好些：

; a% j+ B- V5 \  xAs an individual, to be a son and a student is important to me.

Anyway, your article is not too bad to read.
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good luck